Showing posts with label writing. Show all posts
Showing posts with label writing. Show all posts

Thursday, April 14, 2022

I can’t find the type of stain happening to my two fronts

You can’t google image it 

All it brings up is the most extreme case 

I want to go to my dentists' office without an appointment like what’s this 

Again no appointment 

Just like tell me what this is 

Pretty sure you can eyeball it 

Can’t say what I would do if I found out it was coffee though

I wanna say I would quit 

But Idk 

I love the stuff

I think it would help though 

Would help a lot more if they could do something about it 

Apart of me wants to make an appointment 

But I’m already taking two days off for doms wedding 

And I haven’t done a full week here since I started last Wednesday 

Which really should only hurt me more than it hurts them 

But I can’t tell 

From what I’ve noticed so far this place is petty 

They’ll find anything to complain about 


I wanna ask my coworkers if they see what I see on my teeth 

But you can’t ask someone like that 

You have to ask someone you know 

And trust 

Anyone else 

And that’s all they’ll see whenever they look at you 

It will take years to undo 

Maybe weeks 

Or less 

But it’s Ngl 

Why aren’t any of my friends dentists 

Why aren’t any of my coworkers 

Bc I guess if they were they wouldn’t be my coworkers
 

I’ve always wanted to be a dentist 

Or dental hygienist 

No way I’m getting in now w this grill 

Most I could be is a dentist w bad teeth 

Maybe I could ask my barber 

Or someone at the wedding like the groom 

My best friend

I rarely ever see him 

He’s perfect 

He’ll forget in no time 


Wednesday, March 24, 2021

Essay Thing on One Change I Made to My Cover Letter

1. This is proof of how much attention I pay to form, and structure when it comes to any piece of writing I do. This is where I am now with my cover letter to a newsroom:



2. 9 paragraphs total, a lot of changes were made before I got to this point, but let me start by showing you where I am now by showing you exactly what I'm looking at whenever I look at this, which is just paragraphs 2-6:



3. I may, or may not go over all the changes it took to get through, and to this, but w these five paragraphs alone, I can already see a beginning, middle, and end.

The sentence in between the first, and last two is the middle. That's all I want, and need in between the initial address of my reader, and the thank you for reading the rest. However, there's one thing standing in my way, and that's paragraph 7.

Check it out w paragraph seven; 2-7:




4. Paragraph seven is the last thing you read before paragraph eight, and I guess I'm pairing the thank you for reading the rest w the paragraph before that starting w until then, making it eight paragraphs total.

Nine if we're splitting that last pair up, which again, we're not, but the point is before I make this anymore confusing for you, and myself is that I need to get rid of the seventh paragraph, bc w that we have three paragraphs after the third, which I wanted to be the middle, and in order for it to stay that way, it has to have the same number on both sides, which is two.

Plus I already said please in the last paragraph before that, so now you're just asking them for another thing, which should be a given anyways, after the confusing instructions you've given them to your least to most relevant samples.

Why are you even asking them to accept those things, after you've sounded this confident throughout? Hell yeah, they're gonna accept this cover letter, along w your references, which you still need to get. 

Just close it out after those confusing instructions you give to your samples:



5. See w that change, we went from 9 to 8 paragraphs total, 7 if we're going by my idea of combining the final thank you for reading w the paragraph before then, which we are, so 7 total.

Then from 229 to 210 wds. Granted the changes I didn't tell you I made to paragraphs 5-6, which was basically cause I completely rewrote them altogether, I hope this piece showed you how my attention to overall form, and structure led to my informed decision to cut the eighth paragraph altogether.

Please lmk what you think my chances of getting hired are w this cover letter in the comments, and would you look at that now? W this additional conclusion, in addition to the final drafted example of my cover letter, I have nine parts total to this piece here, if you include every example of my cover letter, which got me to this conclusion.

I thought I could leave it out, but then I couldn't w all of what I said, or didn't say about the changes I made before that in the beginning of the third part, and w that said I just blew my own mind w this, so I can only imagine what you're thinking.

I mean I just went over all this to tell you how I made one change to a cover letter I haven't even sent yet. I should just send this to the company I wanted to submit the cover letter to. They'd just read it, and be like na, this is way more than we asked for.

He's an overachiever, and there aren't enough of those, get him outta here. Or send it under a fake name, like demetri. And then they'll be all like damn demetri, you just wanna watch the world burn, huh.

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